Trip - Somehow the simplistic diction’s gave the verse more depth then i believe intended. You’re good with that as I’ve noticed. But overall this verse was kinda wack. It went on an on about something. That’s the problem, i don’t know what that something is. Might’ve been about life’s journey coming to an end or some shit. I do, however, like the time unspent/ little stretch couplet was cool.
Adonis - everyone seems to be dipping a toe into the nostalgic stream lately. Dull (or was it big baby) did one in open mic (which was dope by the way). I like how you anchored the image of a lost Atlantis thing to the rose colored tint of a long gone chapter. Very nice.
Vote - Adonis. Stronger in pretty much all area.
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