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Old 01-31-2018, 03:20 AM   #9
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Allen, that opener was pretty cool but I think a grandmother or mother.
either way I dug the whole pacing of your verse after that issue.

ur to bitchmade for drama in battles, ur left dead & shook
wen it comes to beef im thinkin Wagyu sucha pussy always gettin cooked


that was pretty dope, I enjoyed the wording of that whole concept.
the rest of the verse was pretty dope as well, especially that closer.

Pinot, that opener was pretty dope, really enjoyed that whole concept.
the following line was kind of eh to me but that Coppola line picked it back up
my favorite part of this seems redundant but idk, either way its nice...

I never been so nice, chop him up and put this bitch on ice
I dual-wield the machetes so u can catch Akimbo Slice


dope verse with its ups & downs but the wordplay was dope.

v/Pinot, I wanted to give it to Allen but that opener kind of threw me off.
his verse was pretty slick for the most part but then after reading Grijs verse.
I was like damn, he hadsome greatwordplay that worked well with his punches.
one or two lines I could have done without but the better verse overall...dope battle.
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