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Saint · 01-30-2018, 04:26 AM

bleak:

some honesty: gun bars won't get u a win in this battle, fiend
I'll get hammered drunk, diss&trigger 'Pis til the end of the magazine

-liked the creativity here. wording hurt here.
Pis is a shaky np imo.

here's my problem: I bang toys it's 3 Macs, bombs & 4 Ruges.
& then: when you bang toys... 3 strap ons w/ more dudes.
Kar KO'd w/ a punt kick. I'm a viper &this frail fuck's done
Ground level for delivs, he'll get opened from the side like a mail truck does

I didnt like this section. 1st one wasnt too good.
2nd blah @ the flip.

Paying Raw Roc to your people. comes to Kannons? Holding the ace.
Ur thinking SMACK Cave Gang, I'm talking the hood turns &folds in your face.

-messy man, setup needed revision.

ock's not suit for blockbusters. Chock fulla old bars.
be a Ghost in the Shell of what he was, cz his punches dated as those are.

- man i like the ghost in the shell ref...excecution was eh

No comparison. I'm handing fronts to fiends;he takes it and sniffs it.
It's vicious, we'll see Vin diagram short if he ain't making the difference.
- diagram cool wp. i actually give u this one. do more of this.

- bleak man...you have some solid ideas but wording is hurting you. I think a bit more reading & changing the words around may help you.

Alvin had Silver & Achilles Hill both dope
I've seen bailiff, it was decent
Seen sticks/Blair witch from cro, his was better tho
127 hours was ok.
Opener was almost too easy, but aight

vote- karp

01-30-2018, 04:26 AM	#9
Saint Scream Join Date: Jun 2015 Posts: 3,251 Battle Record: 63-35 Accomplishments - 50 Wins Champed - BA Picture Roast - Battle Royale Tournament - NBL Pic Roast - Netcees Battle League - NBL Season 11 - HoT Roast - BAL Roast - Tag Team Tourney - NBL Barcotic Cypher - SOL Pic Roast - BA Tag - XXXtentacion Roast - 1-2 LR Champ Rep Power: 22535868	bleak: some honesty: gun bars won't get u a win in this battle, fiend I'll get hammered drunk, diss&trigger 'Pis til the end of the magazine -liked the creativity here. wording hurt here. Pis is a shaky np imo. here's my problem: I bang toys it's 3 Macs, bombs & 4 Ruges. & then: when you bang toys... 3 strap ons w/ more dudes. Kar KO'd w/ a punt kick. I'm a viper &this frail fuck's done Ground level for delivs, he'll get opened from the side like a mail truck does I didnt like this section. 1st one wasnt too good. 2nd blah @ the flip. Paying Raw Roc to your people. comes to Kannons? Holding the ace. Ur thinking SMACK Cave Gang, I'm talking the hood turns &folds in your face. -messy man, setup needed revision. ock's not suit for blockbusters. Chock fulla old bars. be a Ghost in the Shell of what he was, cz his punches dated as those are. - man i like the ghost in the shell ref...excecution was eh No comparison. I'm handing fronts to fiends;he takes it and sniffs it. It's vicious, we'll see Vin diagram short if he ain't making the difference. - diagram cool wp. i actually give u this one. do more of this. - bleak man...you have some solid ideas but wording is hurting you. I think a bit more reading & changing the words around may help you. Alvin had Silver & Achilles Hill both dope I've seen bailiff, it was decent Seen sticks/Blair witch from cro, his was better tho 127 hours was ok. Opener was almost too easy, but aight vote- karp __________________ Last edited by Saint; 01-30-2018 at 04:28 AM.