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Enjoyed the read, decent drop overall.

Nitpicking: A thing I would do if I was you is to proof-read before posting to remove typos and shit like ''phycotic'' and remove excess words like here; ''Cheeks begin to swell and and'', and add some punctuation to help the reader abit more and make the verse seem more complete and polished.

If you want to get better at ''descriptiveness'' a good idea might be to write some shit about a TV being thrown out a window to the ground (or something along those lines, or a vulcano eruption, whatever..) and make it as descriptive as you possibly can. Perhaps it's not OM-worthy, but I guess it's a great thing to do to become better at it.

You're still a fucking bitch for talking shit in our collabo tho'. Peace. ^^