[Adonis]

Jay - Tears warping floor as memories is a very dope concept...Also like the parentheses line...Though, "warped floor, support for her" no bueno. I liked the read. I think it's fitting the first verse I read in a year is yours. I already wrote my verse, but damn our styles are different but similar, mines better though ;) A touching verse that is emotionally driven by a constant barrage of short-comings in a relationship souring due to various reasons. As I said, I enjoyed it entirely. You played with concepts on a line by line basis as well staying focused on the actual topic or direction of verse.

Inno - I had a hard time keeping any rhythm honestly. At points it rhymed solid, and at points the syllables did not line up. As for concept, I appreciated what you did poetically if not rhyming greatly in my eyes. "Never soars from cuts, soars from doors hinging between sanity and reality" Second stanza had another disdain and soaring line though. All in all, this verse was just ok. You followed the topic and did things well, but I personally feel like you also had a few instances that lacked. But as I said, as a whole, enjoyable read.


nRazah - Who the fuck cleans gravel son??? LOL...Good verse though. Off subject, I know you're from Chiraq, you ever heard of "Smino"? He's a Chicago based artist that I fux with right now on the regular. Anyways. This was a short and simple read, you had concept, but I wish you fit in at least one more line concept linking to leaves, kind of adding abit more meat to chew on while digesting the read. Because as is...


I'm left with looking beyond concept because you all did well in that front. I feel Inno fell out of favor in being my least favorite in terms of flow, all three had line by line concept in a major way. But MR. J had more in my eyes. He stayed on topic while matching Razah flow but also gave me, well, more to digest and think about as Razah's verse was sort of all left out in the open, Jay made me think some.


Sorry guys, I tried to break tie, but I can only be honest in whose verse I enjoyed most

v/ Mr. J