Tough topic this week. I'd have problem done something along the lines of "The Only Bridge I Haven't Burned" and wrote some introspective type shit haha! The flow is bonkers on that "wouldn't have a puppy but I'd chuck a stick/bully buddies suck a dick" section. You need to record it if you don't, they're far too slept on in here and just go to waste. I enjoyed the alliterative use in a lot of the words used here, it gives it that kind of skippy flow to it that makes for a real fluent east read to breeze through rather than longer lines that don't really do much or have the rhyme placement too few and far between. I think flow in verses is like a must have but you don't see too many in text concentrate on that element of it, they prefer to keep it more wordy with the too many syllables per line. It holds them back. More people need to actually write to a beat to understand why those words work as well as they do together. Even in normal conversation you'll find a lot of alliteratives come up, that's just language for you. The final couple here it almost takes a left turn and you hand the reader the realisation that this is how you eventually met your better half, pond-side, playing doctors and nurses or some young game equivalent with this female. It was like a brief snapshot in time, but the scheming back and forth with the flow made it a rapid fire read. I think even if YDK had shown he may have struggled with this one. The flow is butter smooth throughout. Like I say, get it recorded save letting it go to waste bro.
Keep that pen moving!
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