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Originally Posted by Allen Knight
fuck that bitch, im buckin a A-R at ya party w/ ya weak friends
blowin out candles ain't the only time u'll see her face light up this weekend
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4-0 vs u & that hurts ur heart faggot, it's killin nik-a's rep
another Winnipeg ya confidence a notch lower than canada's winter temp
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sprayin at ya torso or lower pussy, poppin a mattic raw
im Pekingese & legs off till it looks like ur shits got chewed by rabid dogs
☆☆☆☆☆ rofl the imagery of a rabid pekingnese chewing dudes ankles is jokes
ur ugly wifes leavin u to cheat, she suckin cocks in ya place
that dirty sluts a Grenade, she removed ya ring an went off in ur face
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pistol held up to ya temple, ima gunsling w/ the chrome
this shits like Wwf Elimation Chamber im lettin a hammer ring in ya dome
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i signed in & got it poppin, ura bland faggot tryna speak tuff
my Biofuel to the NBL, urs couldnt light enough fire to spark the league up
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at the end of NC1 u got modded but ur virus ass lost ur rights
cuz the moment u joined u gave the Staph Infections that killed off the site
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do a drive-by on ya family tree, shells hittin u pathetic bastards
bullets will Tapestry bobbin & weaving thru all there genetic patterns
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sorry been real busy.
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Originally Posted by ill nik-A
Fuck what this nerd say, got ur girl & anotha hoe givin me brains for my birthday
u think she doesn’t go both ways... cuz that’s ya thought process for all ya forced wordplay
☆☆☆☆☆ ouch
Ya verse gay. I’m the new gun bar king, nigga, call me nik-guns, always aimin the glock
U either gonna face the steel or run... cuz it’s a Le’Veon Bell highlight reel when I wait on the block
☆☆☆☆☆ nice
wisdom claimin the top. laughin gas can’t pump up ya style, the shots numbin u clowns
Im also the king of making u bite the steel... ya dentist calls that a crown
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Heat sums up my town, I’ma kill u no matter the weather nigga, my flow is real
I’m cold as steel... got zero chill, so I’m doing drive by’s on the snow mobile
☆ indirect swag & flow
u a little nigga so my tribute to this bitch geek, is to pull out the fifth, sleep
u never seen a Mexican surpass six feet, so when I kill ya it’ll be memorial... for ya family the shit’s deep
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Kid, please. Im an OG with a new stance u ain’t fuckin with killer nik
I’m shooting from a different angle... u just recycle old concepts & change the wording a little bit
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I ain’t on that civil tip. My money clean Uncle Sam is givin this nerd the max
I’m quick to kill u and get the W-2.... nigga, that’s turbo tax
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u hurt, I laugh. No money for u, The gun’ll leave holes exposing this dude
I use similes since u like Broke... which means only Lesner will be voting for u
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Fire battle. AK was only a bar short from a flawless, while Nik had 2 slips but 2 dope personals to go with his verse. Nik, there's a valid argument for why I abhor similes and "that's" bars, and it's because of how it dumbs down a writer's creative process. For example, your W-2 bar.
I ain’t on that civil tip. My money clean Uncle Sam is givin this nerd the max
I’m quick to kill u and get the W-2.... nigga, that’s turbo tax
You put the work in for the setup to build the punch, but in doing so you made the setup wordy and left the closer to falter due to simplicity. You easily could have shortened your setup and still included enough build in subtlety to execute your concept. Instead of really illustrating your creativity in the closer, you did it in the setup and made the closer, which is supposed to drive home the concept, a bit underwhelming.
I gave you 3 ☆'s because I liked the concept itself and actually enjoyed the work you did put it in, I just couldn't give you 5 ☆'s because of the aforementioned breakdown. If you're going to do "that's", which I'm really not opposed to, you need to be more creative in executing
AK, dope verse. You did a simile in your verse but if you notice I gave you 5 ☆'s and that's because I actually do like those kind of similes. You caught my attention early on with "the shits like wwe elimination chamber", then you effectively delivered the punch. I enjoy similes that aren't just abruptly placed in a bar, and this one wasn't.
Also, the way you do gunbars without needing similes is admirable, too. You and Unfukwitable are probably the best at it.
v-AK