Sym, your verse is cool but it comes off too poetic for my tastes at this point in the league after the verses of last week.
Im not saying that I didnt enjoy it but the whole vibe just seemed to drag to me even with the picture laid out as it is.
I would have expected you to take this above & beyond while just showcasing what you are capable of.
unfortunately that was not what you did, I dont know if you were strapped for time or just didnt feel inspired but...
well I dont know what to say, there are moments where you shine with your vocab but does it weave together as nicely as i hoped?
no...commendable though...
Inno, Your verse was pretty cool and I really enjoyed your approach.
I dont know if you were just taking it easy or what happened here though.
the sky portions of your piece start to become a bit redundant after the second section.
I had high hopes for where you were going up until that point. it just seemed. blah.
regardless you shine in the mere moments you possess in this piece but it needs more mass.
you gotta put some weight onto that bitch & ride it out....
v/I honestly found both styles to be well suited for one another in this situation
Sym went a more poetic route but grasped on some great concepts even though the wording felt rushed
Had he fixed that up in the time he had and made it cleaner I would say it was a more than acceptable piece.
Inno came in with the perception of a vet while putting his verse together.
he trimmed the fat away and left some of the better ideas on the floor in my opinion.
the sky swaying in waves and whatever else you pursued kind of felt me robbed.
but you did have the edge against your opponent...I wanted to enjoy Syms piece but I felt like his mind went elsewhere about 1/3 of the way in until he gained footing.
decent battle
v/Innovator
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