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Join Date: Jun 2013
Posts: 2,151
Battle Record: 7-3
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u way too gentle to duff me, type feeble n still a whelp
i honestly don't sensei threat from u, go find 1 that'll teach u to kill urself
lol @ whelp. Good line here
dubbed urself classick huh?, it's radical n seems legit
ur screen name bout creative as every unoriginal faggot who thinks of it
nah typical weird usuername type punch
blam steel or keep it text g?, bang ur gone w/ a smirk
get caught up if u mess w/ da strap, the same way ankle monitors work
alright cool
leave u in serious condition, i'm lit as neighbor battles
clap the metal to give ur chest a jolt, u'll need some defibrillator paddles
nice
otbva won't hustle me none, voters ain't retarded here
bump any opinion this fleecer render, plz do both ur fucking garbage tier
ehh
ur wp's ain't nicer than mine, that amount to no stress
cuz u force demonstrate up reach b, enough to rally a thousand protests
alright I like I like
Broke: stfu and stop with all the wack voting. Anyways This verse was good, I really liked the ankle monitor line.
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Im here to raise the bar this is ‘pen lifintg’ ,and its quite ‘cursive’ /
Put a SPELL on u , they gon C 2 O’s and a L at the end , cool sound like a nice person /
not bad, bit wordy though
U SWEAR u BLACKIN on which craft? (witchcraft) u must like CURSING /
Put ‘pressure on his flow’ , the ‘pipe burstin’ , sun (son) better shed light in this room or its night curtains/
nah man, explaining your wp is a no, ESPECIALLY doing it right after you say it lol
Name yaself after Brock Lesnar ? The fake SHOWS ! im in the scratch the SERIAL off this mac stage/
But This aint BL SERIES , plus how u gon fight Broke n every one a ya 'smack staged' ?/
i wanna like this but again this one is wordy like your opener. Decent line but gotta work on simplifying your wording and execution
Im SUITED for war , its in my genes (JEANS) to sneak a (SNEAKER) ‘loaded cal’ thats what I tucks (TUX) in it/
Whoever SLACKS getting aDRESSED with clips, my CLOTH got more layers den a lux gimmick/
good bar, only advice here is don’t force wp just to have it. It’s gotta flow smoothly in the punch and let it explain itself[/b]
I hope C aware ( a wear ) cuz a pair’ll (apparel) KICK from the BLAZER and send CAPS flyin
This (k)not a TIE , gats firing ! Nigga I spazz on the REAL like mack myron/
good again, but the structure is really hurting your impact man
Show me who the best! I can troll (control) champions , cuz when i BLAC it hurts..like how can he (kenny) do this?/
Trust ! It will be trays (betrays) to pop , for thinking fakin' a count(account) I let it FLY on sight/site like Kenny Lewis
dope concept here but execution and everything else hurt it
TIME !!
classick: Yo you have mad potential my dude, a lot of your concepts are dope and you have good flow and creativity. You just really need to work on simplifying your bars and developing a better style and structure. Take my feedback into consideration and try formulating your punches in other ways. Decent showing here but broke lesnar gets this.
VOTE: Cool
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