[Clout]

Originally Posted by BROKE LESNAR

u way too gentle to duff me, type feeble n still a whelp
i honestly don't sensei threat from u, go find 1 that'll teach u to kill urself

Nice wording, like this one.

dubbed urself classick huh?, it's radical n seems legit
ur screen name bout creative as every unoriginal faggot who thinks of it

lol, not bad.

blam steel or keep it text g?, bang ur gone w/ a smirk
get caught up if u mess w/ da strap, the same way ankle monitors work

Eh not feeling this one

leave u in serious condition, i'm lit as neighbor battles
clap the metal to give ur chest a jolt, u'll need some defibrillator paddles

Alright

otbva won't hustle me none, voters ain't retarded here
bump any opinion this fleecer render, plz do both ur fucking garbage tier

Flee/Surrender nice. Agree OTBVA is a terrible site.

ur wp's ain't nicer than mine, that amount to no stress
cuz u force demonstrate up reach b, enough to rally a thousand protests

Nah, i dont like how this one.

Originally Posted by classickERBL

Im here to raise the bar this is ‘pen lifintg’ ,and its quite ‘cursive’ /
Put a SPELL on u , they gon C 2 O’s and a L at the end , cool sound like a nice person /

Nah, this is long bar kind of stuff lol. I dont like this one bit man. You're overkill here. This comes off more as a compliment anyways.

U SWEAR u BLACKIN on which craft? (witchcraft) u must like CURSING /
Put ‘pressure on his flow’ , the ‘pipe burstin’ , sun (son) better shed light in this room or its night curtains/

We're know what your trying to say, you don't need expos. If you need expos your wording is bad.

Name yaself after Brock Lesnar ? The fake SHOWS ! im in the scratch the SERIAL off this mac stage/
But This aint BL SERIES , plus how u gon fight Broke n every one a ya 'smack staged' ?/

Terrible, This was worse then me writing my first research paper in english.

Im SUITED for war , its in my genes (JEANS) to sneak a (SNEAKER) ‘loaded cal’ thats what I tucks (TUX) in it/
Whoever SLACKS getting aDRESSED with clips, my CLOTH got more layers den a lux gimmick/

Old concepts, old Wordplay. This is an extremely ancient way of writing.

I hope C aware ( a wear ) cuz a pair’ll (apparel) KICK from the BLAZER and send CAPS flyin
This (k)not a TIE , gats firing ! Nigga I spazz on the REAL like mack myron/

Nah.
Show me who the best! I can troll (control) champions , cuz when i BLAC it hurts..like how can he (kenny) do this?/
Trust ! It will be trays (betrays) to pop , for thinking fakin' a count(account) I let it FLY on sight/site like Kenny Lewis
TIME !!

Alright rattlesnake aka Broke you won this one. Classic you are using a style no one uses anymore. You're forcing so many play on words its hard to want to keep reading. You need to read up on some of top battlers here. You need to be less intrusive with the flips and more subtle. Where it reads smoothly and doesn't sound like a your struggling to talk. You have too much going on in your lines. Pick a concept use a wordplay that isn't so forced. You need to stop the expos.

v/ Broke