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Originally Posted by NYCSPITZ
Darkness and cunning are deep in his soul, lurking within
Taking planets in hostile fashion on the burst of a whim
Leaving members of the populace to nurse with their jinn
In lieu of death or exile, they choose to curse in the wind…
He’s planted seeds in this city, but I can see the same trap
There’s denial; even after we've evolved to 30 percent brain cap
...Still remember the takeover when I was just a little girl in a home
Their demonic insignias - a world of pearls and of bones
Experimented on my parents, somewhere in the firmament’s throes
When they died, I knew at once; now a girl was alone
So I excelled in academics, athletics and speech at their schools
and went along with that indoctrinating reason of fools
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I feel like this was the strongest segment of the piece. Great work from a great author, shaking off the dust but dropping a well told, enthralling tale. Looking to seeing more from him this season.
The sunset burned overhead as he veered the arid plains
until our expert ronin finally neared their palisades.
The fear that captivated him crossing swords with the henchmen
appeared to have abated having turned his thoughts to redemption.
He saw them beheading his father without any remorse
so nothing short of their death is enough to settle the score.
His weapon was drawn from the sheath that housed its intent
as he head into war both outnumbered, and out for revenge!
There were thousands of them against just him on his own
but he wasn't about to surrender, Samurai of principle don't.
The sadistic Shinobi clan were a disgrace to 'The Way'
while he lived by the code of honor he would take to the grave.[/quote]
I think this was amazing. very solid quote here from diablo, not familiar with ur work or if this is a new alias but kudos to you sir.
mvgt diablo this week, his piece didn'it have any hiccups and was absolutely enthralling. NYC lacked development, not sure he expected this performance from his opponent. good battle, great reads from both. thanks.