LOL
The start of this read so completely differently to the second half to me. I liked the standing out like Exit line at the beginning, then the compare it/parrot wordplay but really the final 6-8 lines are way better than the mid-section here. It seemed you schemed more and it came together more naturally, almost organic andjust rolled off the pen, while the middle section seemed to be you pushing through the writers block somewhat and just writing to get passed it - that's what I do at least.
This was J shaking the rust off. Keep that pen moving!
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