Mr J
like, I don't know how to feed your stuff cuz I can't tell if you're just fucking around or not.
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... feeling like Space Jam / ... sex life of the Jason mask.
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like... how you gonna end on
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getting laid is getting harder to do aint that some shit?
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mostly I think it's cuz I like feedbacking specific lines and I don't have much to work with in this piece.
most of the verse is more or less fine I guess but good lord.
Objective
my brain is tired from reading Mr J's
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... stacked with hate and profanity, / violence and vanity mixed with lack of faith in humanity.
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clean, I really liked this line
this piece was weird to me in a way, it just felt like such a huge change in... everything after the first eight lines.
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... like; "I got your backs (... for bucks)". / ... lack of trust is just that for us
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was cool, though I had to read it several times to clean it up in my head.
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... poor excuse of a car: / ... you could borrow, or nah?
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was really cool, that was a great rhyme and like, realistic sequence.
I felt there, up until the next lines took me out of it again (but I'm sure anyone that goes blind rage can connect).
I think it's "taking the piss" so this threw me for a minute trying to figure out if this was about something else lmao, but I got it.
anyways yeah, shifted heavily after the first bit, and got more simple/gut reaction-ish I guess I could say.
mvgt objective