Lol what's to hide rookie? DMV's tone tellin me he's shook, see
Fuck keepin it private bitch...even your NAME sends the message you're a pussy
^^^ Mehhhhhh okay
Your rank left me dead, it's proven...Bags training's the best solution
No plans to see Tone UP this season 'less the gyms a new years resolution
^^^ Not sure if this is played against him, seems like the obvious flip for his name. But since I haven't seen battles against him it's new to me and I liked it.
Tone's murdered woww u changed from a slow learner now
Look, Infestation a restructure for this prick that'd make Amens coworker proud
^^^ I saw the thread so the reference lands. But damn that second line was wordy as fuck. Every word in the set-up aside from one had 1 syllable; second line had a lot more syllables that fucked the flow.
& madd niggas smash ur bae, no train, they ran cascades
She hits rails servicing bodies at highspeed it put the Amtrak crash to shame
^^^ Not bad
You're shit in the league, bro...unworthy to step to the king
Not since Meghan Markles hand we seen a bitch so outta line enter the ring
^^^ Had to google who that was, no idea the chick from Suits was going to marry a prince, that's wild. I get the "outta line" since she's not the usual choice for a prince, but I don't get the reference about her hand (unless it's literally just her hand in marriage) not a bad bar, just confusing.
The NBL has limits on wack shit, I'm doubtin u'll stay
1 voice saying: 'we cant Baritone a second longer' like it's out of the range
^^^ This was dope. Good word/nameplay and a solid closer.
Overall it was an okay verse. I think you got in your own way with the wording sometimes but you definitely have creative concepts which I think is the harder part. Maybe just revisit each line after you finish the verse and try to cut out unnecessary words. Read it outloud and see how it sounds. Check if it'll sound better if you use different words, etc.
Good shit!
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