[Mr. J]

Sym,

Your piece came off short yet sweet, telling the inner workings of the surroundings
really capturing the idea of how things are effected (affected?) by what can happen.
the rhymes were pretty noteworthy as the story begins to unfold. very well done.
I cant find too much to really complain about here though...

Objective,

I thought the use of the same topic was clever on your behalf.
you basically flipped the topic that Sym wrote on and added your own twist.
which would be commendable if it were done in battle where such was asked of.
but knowing that you had 2 days over your opponent to toy with it seems meh.
regardless you really bring a polished portrayal of what you are trying to convey
i guess its fair to say you did a great job.

v/This battle is pretty cool, both went at the same topic which makes it competitive in a way
I can understand how one would be able to pick apart what is already drawn out for the other.
it gives one freedom to take something already done and basically build right over it.
and maybe thats my gripe with whats going on here, I mean yeah its dope but comes off too easy.
maybe its just me but I though both could have came through with a more thorough process.
I feel like it should have been a way different battle than Im seeing right now but it comes off meh to me right now.
I dont know if its after reading the other verses or not but I wanted to see more evolve from this...
I guess I cant complain since its early season material but I feel like both would play off each other well.
it feels like this is more of a collab than a competitive soiree...but if I have to choose who had the better verse.
Im going to have to give it Objective.
better luck next time Sym