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Symetrik -- I liked a lot of the internal rhymes and how they were woven in and out of the sequences naturally. Repetition of the pause theme and how you changed it up was also pretty cool. Before I saw the length of this I really thought this was going in a direction like Ready Player One and I thought that was a bold choice, just going towards that kind of dystopia. I quickly realized that this verse was going to touch that kind of depth and tried to delve into what was there. When I finished though, I was left desiring a bit more - this was the kind of scene you would see at the beginning of a teaser trailer. Little flashes of storyline and some of the main backbone but just enough to make you tilt your head in that confused dog sort of way and then get intrigued for the rest of the trailer. Thats the kind of feeling I had when I finished it. Some nice thematics, but a bit on the short (not length necessarily) side.

Objective -- the ending kind of crash and burned for me, and the beginning was a little too....telling me what to think and not describing the scene. That middle body though, strong man. You got in this groove describing whats happening and the writing felt natural and purposeful. I think it was the strongest writing of this match. The overall message was nothing I couldnt sneer at, and the execution was rollercoaster-y, but the prime piece of writing in this stood out to me in a unique way.

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