I don't usually vote on MMLP battles but since it's open and I can't see it affecting the battles outcome, here it is:
Sym started off fire, I think i've seen him battle in AOWL previously (maybe?) but his verse here was a lot more polished. or at least, the beginning half was. The second half really lost it for me, anything from here on out:
Quote:
he could be death, the shadow in light,
the taker of breath and a thief in the night,
no one that knew her assumed her the type,
to give up on love and her kids and her life.
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Just couldnt keep to the scheme or bar he had set before it, and there was a noticeable difference between the two halves. It reads like it was wrote with two different people, in fact, thats how big a gulf there is between the two halves of the story. LOL
MMLP: You changed the style up here, which is cool in one sense to see you toying with what works and doesnt, but it's very limiting to try and stick to a scheme like this. It takes huge technical skill to do properly and effectively, I don't think you always nailed it, but when you were on you were ON, nah mean? There's a reason people don't take this style on very often, though, the degree of difficulty is huge but so is the margin for error. It's very restrictive, very rigid, and starts to border on the robotic sounding when you adhere to it so heavily. It was written quite well, i'm not sure if all the Norman Bates' references will be picked up but i'm sure you'll enjoy knowing those subtle hints are there and going unnoticed.
I've got MMLP winning, marginally.