Hey man, I don't want to sound too pessimistic, but this comes off as very generic and static.
The one original line I read was "And how we’d joke when she wore my shirts far too oversized" -- the only description that gives insight into a unique relationship. The concept itself has been done to death. That is not to say that you didn't have a good grasp on mechanics, because based on the construction it looks like you have the potential to drop bombs in this forum. But phrases like "lord, this lady’s perfect" and “No darling you mustn’t leave!” and "she would hang onto me with her cocoa butter thighs" are yawn-inducing. I would encourage you to either dig deeper into your subject matter to make me feel it personally, or ramp up your rhyme scheme and mechanics so that it becomes more of a technical display.
Keep writing.
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