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Old 07-11-2017, 05:15 AM   #3
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Probably because we need an audio section again.

This was interesting. I like the thought and creativity that went into this idea.

There were a few negatives - the track took too long to get going. Your vocals started off a bit too quiet, and although there were some positives lyrically, your flow was way off on quite a few occasions, which is a shame because where your flow worked this sounded really nice.

The chorus had potential. The quite lazy sounding "slump" worked but I also felt your chorus needed a little bit more.

Overall, the idea was really nice, but I felt the execution was quite way off in places.
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