[Geno]

yo, this joint is long as fuck. but you got some dope content. pretty raw for real. dug a lot of the lines. biggest suggestion.. if you want more feed try these 2 things. make shorter posts. not saying the quality wasnt good. but a lot of people wont come in and read something this long, especially if you havnt built a solid rep for your name yet. maybe youhave maybe you havnt, i aint been around. i mean this shouldnt get slept on imo. but also. try to drop a lot of the filler words you use in your lines. these long bar joints are cool but i feel like some of you lines if worded correctly could be more impactful and easier to read if you had made two lines out the one long ass line you dropped. i mean not all of your long lines were hard to get through cause you propperly inserted a comma or whatever. but instead of a comma, sometimes you can hit that return bar instead. idk. just my thoughts

as for the red, i thought this shit was dope. just crazy long man. try to transition a little smoother from line to line also. this is written like a an audio joint to me more so than a text piece because of the transitioning not rhyming and being super smooth. VERY WORDY writing man. hopefully that makes sense. i hope you continue to post and stick around. the more you read other shit and keep writing the more tricks of the trade youll acquire. peace