Maximus
Solid. I had to look up two words "chiromancer" and "austerities". Good vocabulary. Touching piece. The description shady creatures was a little shaky, but in hindsight it does describe the pic accurately. I like how the mountains could be perceived as tents. I wanted more ultimately. Flow kind of reminded me of Srals which isn't necessarily a bad thing eg; tightly wound progression and transitioning from line to line. Very interested to hear how you interpret topics as the season unfolds. Very solid read given the picture, just wanted more.
Adonis
Before I start this verse, I just had to scroll up and comment right off the bat on the vintage squiggly lined centered verse. Classic. K. Ambitious verse. You always present your opinions very confidently as if proclaiming it from the rooftops. I like how this verse ushers in your new avy. Nice touch. Enjoy some of the lines, some already quoted by others. But I really disliked "likes in a thread?" Felt a little left field semi directed at the AOWL? Intriguing verse though. The hacking truths line could've used some more mechanical punctuation marks to clarify the idea more coherently.
Overall my decision comes down to two roads. Adonis not finishing his idea thoroughly enough in that last stanza. Going left field instead of truly centering his idea versus Maximus shady opening lines. Overall, I liked Maximus interpretation of the picture slightly more. MVGT Maximus
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