Interesting battle. I came in here predicting timeless to get my vote, but after reading both verses, I'm not so sure.
timeless, smooth verse. It flowed nicely to me, and I don't have any major critique about it, it just didn't really grab my attention. Jesodist has a certain style, 95% of the time it's about angels & demons, spirituality & Ancient Aliens type shit. Usually I'm not a fan of it, and I think his diction doesn't help either, this time around it was bearable, even enjoyable. There's so many things I would change about his verse as far as wording goes, but the overall idea behind the verse actually really fit the topic. Also, he had some lines in there where I liked what he was saying & the wording didn't take too much away from that.
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Meditating and Speaking Sacredely Bleeding scriptures so benign that the Angels are Weeping
tears of joy to engulf to drown all the Pagans Receding in the depths of hell where Hades is Sleeping,
The original place of origin where they initially Designed the Mode Subliminally Inscribe the Code
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I feel like you got a little bit of that Frank syndrome with the wordiness, he just has a better grasp on diction than you do. There's so much critique I can give you about the verse, as far as what I would have taken out, sliced it up, added certain words in certain places, and most likely would have meant a smoother read, but I feel like that critique would be asking you to switch your style, which I won't do.
Anyways, timeless already has his mechanics on lock I just wasn't a huge fan of how the topic was attacked, and actually enjoyed Jesodist' verse more.
vJesodist