[ZeeDee]

Mike, the concept was cool and ur story outline was decent too. Nothing over the top, but pretty good flow and structure too. The build up was done with some creativity and the details u gave helped the character development. The mimicing a chicken and thinking dads a rooster gave a humorous twist that I can appreciate... I actually like a lil humor cuz its rarely a tool used by writers in these leagues... cool verse

Buddah, this started out fire for me to read... everything was great for the first part in building an exciing character, but u didn't really add any life examples of this character like what is he doing now with these power with specific examples, what is the rest of the reach doing.... the character development isn't really there, the character is just thrown at the reader... the flow and naration were both great. Just would of liked to see and know more about this character... I do like the craziness u used to create this character tho

Vote Mike