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Old 10-17-2016, 11:52 PM   #6
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Verse 1 was pretty cool, came off more braggy to me..
I thought the famous painting/beef thread line came in.
didnt like the rest though, didnt fit with those 4 lines...
the first line made me lol but wasnt noteworthy..

Verse 2 had some slick lines that I really enjoyed.
I liked everything except for those last 2 punches...
they came off kind of rushed compared to the opening
your opener was the hardest line I thought..

v/Verse 2, the verse was more enjoyable for me.
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