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Old 10-11-2016, 01:41 AM   #12
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verse one was alright, I thought the suspected your plot line was cool
the Trump line could have been worded better..otherwise an alright verse.

the 2nd verse had a few decent concepts, that opener being the strong point of this battle
didnt really like the way this was pieced together, didnt like that Kim line
seems like the go to punch this week...

Ima have to go with the 2nd verse with that opener.
wasnt really feeling the impact of these verses but the 2nd edged it out for me
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