Phil wit' the classic intro talk...feelin that
verse- "shining light upon the Elephant"....damn thats deep
Flow was good over this beat... rhyme scheme kinda basic from what I heard before but this the type of track where it's cool to let that slide and get deep wit' it...
diggin' the whole verse...good work
Hook- wasn't feelin' all of it...it works...but coulda been spiced up a bit more wit Layers or tone....or a whole new approach to the cadence... but content wise its straight
Geno- "I work hard but my child support is a fuckin Mortgage" damn neva heard that said that way before... gave a lot of imagery and personal feel
endind "dont want no ones advice if u don't even know what its like" perfect closer for this track... Ur style is one I've always been a fan of...delivery sounds fresh ova this beat...feel like u meshed wit' it a lil' better.
Overall real solid track..If this is gonna be an album cut' which I feel the verses are great for I'd suggest re-doing the hook...More of a singing approach would fit better in my opinion...maybe even have someone else lace vocals for it...I dunno...thats the only part of this track I'd like to see stronger...cuz it's a deep topic that a lot of listeners can relate too....Feel if the hook is somethin' they could get more into it will have more re-play value...
Nice work as alwayz fellaz..
Hit me uP
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