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Old 05-17-2013, 07:53 PM   #9
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Awesome battle.

Tyson you really impressed me with the tone of mysticality you introduced with reincarnation and maintained throughout the end when you mentioned spirit leaving its vessel. You paint a compelling picture of a wise sage who lives life questioning and regrets the life of non-action that this bred.

Objective's ending ended on a similar note and was also mystical, vibed a bit with the law of attraction and the everything is part of one whole and all matter is interrelated concept (which I agree with). I thought the character was dope and it added some nice suspense for you to end with a cool flourish of getting beamed up and returning to earth with ultimate wisdom type shit.

Overall I was feeling OBJ more this time but both came nice. Just felt his story was put together better this time around, more fluid as opposed to the jumping decades to certain life events approach which could also work too but I think obj pulled it off w/ a lil more swag.

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