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Old 09-07-2016, 05:23 PM   #11
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I will also be short.

BB

I read your verse as a "dissection of a relationship." I thought that was a cool approach. The verse, from a stylistic standpoint, read very similarly to dead man's. But I think some of the phrasing could be improved.

Frank

It was a straightforward story and was funny at times. I'm probably just a couple years older than the Pokémon crowd. So, the subject matter wasn't as captivating to me as perhaps it was for others.

This was a close battle. But I'm voting for BB because I enjoyed his verse slightly more.

Vote: BB
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