[dead man]

i wish i had the time or patience to offer a better breakdown for you guys.

pinot: as a pure storyteller, you are just about the most consistent i know. you don't dabble in the abstract or the gray. you stick to what you know and do it well. it's almost like reading a limerick, or the lyrics to one of those catchy songs we used to hear as kids that would teach us something. there once was a man from nantucket. i really liked how you tied it into the "idea" portion of the picture, which i did not catch until after reading your submission. bright idea indeed. clever as always and very tight in all technical aspects. you are a master of your craft for sure. you and copypat are almost similar for being the most lighthearted and fun writers here. its genuinely refreshing and all around excellent to have you here contributing artistically. the nicknames were funny. the turn at the end was well done. very easy to digest. not something i necessarily would feel the need to come back and read again, however.

i think this is where ENG sort of excelled. its a preference of mine to dissect and reflect on written works and this was something that requires a slow burn. you took the word "idea" and the image at hand - and put it through the ringer. casted every shade (pardon my wording) available onto these singular concepts, bound them together and made it something spectral and grand. it really was the little details you used that made this worth picking apart. you continued to recall that same image: heat and sun and current and charge. lighter flick. ash, cinder. holding a slab of ordinary and fleshing it out until it fills the room. this was one of your best showings as of late. i think that is a testament to the what people can produce under the right circumstances. ie, a tournament of this magnitude.

i'm not entirely sure on this but i need to cast a vote one way or another. i dont know if lars intended this to be a "story only" tournament and if that is the criterion we should be gauging the work by. obviously pinot would be the choice here if that was the case, and would likely be the person to beat moving forward. as for now though... voting ENG.