I'm starting to notice a pattern here.
There are a lot of guys here who are good, like fine. They're great.
But then there's this group who're on a whooooole different level.
Holy shit dead man.
I could sit and just talk about the subtle rhyme scheme alone. Those false hanging rhymes tho'!:
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Originally Posted by dead man
vanilla bean afterdinner coffee creamer and cake
sweating through the polyester, lying awake
i know that i'm the mistake. another habit to break
you only know me as a walk to the lake, and nevermore
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Some people would think that "nevermore" ain't supposed to be there, but that's masterfully played right there.
The flow. The rhymes. The cadence and imagery, all next level shit.
The story itself seemed to be from the perspective of the speaker and his relationship with a married woman (one he's known since they've been kids) who seems unable, or unwilling to admit she needs to get her life together.
the story is in the description of this woman's life. And we get a very well rounded individual: all her good points and bad, from youth to adulthood. The basic question of the piece comes from the speaker simply asking: Are you worth it?
My interpretation of the piece is that it's a way to prove that one's worth is proven through his or her own life's works. In the end, it's up to you to prove your own worth.
Now this isn't to say that NYCSPITZ was bad, hell no, his shit was good. I loved the piece as a sci-fi dystopian view of how things can go bad when the general populace stops asking questions and allows the controlling few free reign.
This story reminds me a lot of my Utopia series withe the same mood and themes and, for hip hop heads at least, it should always be a story that one of us tells.
That being said (and just like I mentioned in another vote) dead man was just the better writer. And it had NOTHING to do with Spitz being bad. He had a way more imaginative story (I loved the idea of the serum), dead man just had a better grasp for technique and more sound writer's voice.
good shit from both tho'
v/ dead man