Cimm -- this moved fast, i mean that positively, but it was partially because it was so short. You said everything that needed to be said to make the trail of thought come full circle, and you didnt miss a step. At the same time you only said 3 things: how far he traveled, when he started traveling (presumably) and that he was reflective. Wording was crisp, poetic devices were there and it was emotive. Hit all the check marks, I just wish you gave more.
Bags -- you tryna be joel? I liked what you did with this (controversey aside). Shit was fluid and gave it that old-rapper-on-the-block kind of life. It was an enjoyable read and progressed smoothly. Only problem was it followed one of the simplest formulas in rap and wasnt that interesting.
In the end I gotta give it to Cimm for writing that moved me more.
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