Vulgar -- i havent lost it like i did at "das_juden" and amazyklon. This would have been perfect for the martyrs tournament you hosted (not to say its not perfect here). Cross contaminating timelines (crayola/amazon/shipped sales/catalogs with a 1936 date) makes me cringe a bit as it works against your intended 'reality' here. On the other hand, in fantasy, it is quite humorous and enjoyable. I enjoyed the presentation and take on the topic a lot. Good job
Unborn -- I like the "hacked his soul" phrase, because it was both hacked like a computer and hacked to pieces. Im not sure if that was intended, but yeah. The verse moved fast, a little too fast i think. In the sense that i wasnt drawn to the character, i was just explained the circumstances. This lead to an ending which was supposed to have appeal universally (which includes me), but i just read it as words. I do like the concept of a crusading hacker who set the world free by outting all of the institutes that are slowly consuming our economy by becoming a mega-entity (the 1% etc).
In the end I felt unborns verse wasnt fleshed out enough to match the humor and topic of vulgars
Vulgar
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