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Deadman - I dont remember how to vote....I just read your verse several times and enjoyed it. Specifically the wording, but I feel like praising a writer for good wording is like praising a chef for using fresh ingrediants. I guess what I liked about this (and your writing in general) is that the themes are very human and come from raw expierence or observation. Cinematic flashes of interesting points in a long term, unofficial, relationship and the narrators internal turmoil towards their affairs. I dont know what else to say other than it was an enjoyable read.

NYC - i took this as an allegory more than anything. Masses of people kept distracted by noxfoid - though in your verse its a regulated drug it could stand for anything from sheepy tv channels to drugs themselves. Whatever popular things are keeping the masses distracted such as the coincidental release of pokemongo the day hilary clinton was announced to not be prosecuted for treason. Though the narrator was the man in charge here (seemingly) he saw that, through banned substances (real news outlets, maybe?), life was worse off than it seemed. Something (assumably, you didnt get there) that could be fixed.

I know my interpretation of NYCs verse isnt 100% and its skewed by my own imagination, but I feel the point is more than driven here. When it comes down to choosing its difficult for me. Deadman had something that hooked me and tempted me to re-read and re-enjoy. NYC had a thought provoking concept that I re-read to reimagine. Nothing necessarily wrong with either but I enjoyed

Deadman more


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