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Old 05-17-2013, 04:02 PM   #7
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Zen

I'm bonkers, a primed monster disguised amongst ya
As a normal civilian, Born a chameleon swarmed with brilliance,
The lord of villians surrounded by mangled treasures,

-whoa ho ho, real strong flow throughout this stanza, eager to see where it leads,
didn't really like "phantom shepherd" though, kinda strange wording

Than a pattern of peace that these faggots preach, So, Come and grab a seat
And gather relief in my caverns beneath my manor, "The Last of the Reach",

- wow lines, got that POWER like Will.I.Am

Description overall fit the topic real nice, just wish this character
actually did something besides look cool. I was always the kid who wanted to know the
backstory to my toys, and this verse was like a really cool toy with limited backstory lol

Mike

the father neglected his son, and only became aware of HIS pain/
he was overcome with emotions of despair and disdain,
as a single parent, he just wasn't prepared for this strain/
so all of the stress really began to wear on his brain,
he would go out for long stretches, leaving the kid scared in restraints/

- really liked that whole series there

You are one of the most solid story tellers, in terms of Freitag's triangle,
I really appreciate that kind of effort and consistency

lol kinda funny and sad to think of this abused chicken boy.

but as they arrive at that old house, he approaches a rooster/
gives him a hug, full embrace, looking up at the sky,
says im home at last dad, and begins to cry/

- lol hilarious and poignant, also thought provoking cuz at the end of the
day, what is a father?? fantastic.


TOUGH battle, my BOTW so far cuz it really is a display of great lyricism and
strong visuals and rhymes throughout. Imma go with the verse I enjoyed more despite
the technical wizardry

Vote -Mike Wrecka this time around
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