[IamBenT]

Zygote

so why do i continue onwards? im not a good person
not in any sense of these dogmatic assertions,
call you sociopathic because you overreacted
go from nomadic to a balance of homeostatic soul digging practice.
the opening gambit. take a holistic approach,
jump off the plane and swim for the boat
this isn’t the truth and it isn’t a joke

- this part helped develop the speaker for me, better than the beginning, this is marked improvement over your flow from last week, it
makes a great difference in readability and fun factor to keep me engaged

before and after, black and white, up and down
this topic makes me very emotional ok so bye for now

- ending is a bit ambiguous but, i like the use of questions
on the way towards the end of this..

ZeeDee

RAGE is the term we've created to serve
as the homo sapiens warning
Fantasies made worst with fake Captain Kirks
have turned into rape by the morning

-very dope scheme here, and everything comes clear in the trademark ZeeDee way,

some of this just made me LOL its so out of this world (pardon the pun lol)

Using wet tentacles to suck from testicles
down through the anus and taste.....

- gross but very effective!

Their babies are villains

- didn't like the use of "villains" again here, but i get you are working with a tricky scheme

Murdering men, women, children and more in an unstoppable wave
Sex's the unlimited source, given with force nonstop to their graves
This becoming a popular craze is leading to more possible rapes
But victims are silenced within this violence and are the fathers today

- very dope, you have really stepped it up here in these last two weeks, these bars
are prime examples!

All in all great sense of pacing throughout the story and I love the background setup in the first
chunk of the verse.Last line was a great example of some funny wordplay.

Tough battle. I feel that Zy had a great concept, and a really fresh idea, but weak character development
had the verse fall a bit flat for me. I love his flow here, much better than last week, and attention to
detail, voice is strong but I never got enough of a feeling of what was at stake for this character.

For Zee, some of the extracurricular sex details were a bit distracting. I really liked when you changed gears
and gave us the story of the Strokers, verse really picked up there. Flow was on point throught like 85 percent of
this which I really appreciated. Ending was strong as well.

Vote -ZeeDee really brought his A game this week against what I feel is a B verse from Zy.