[IamBenT]

Adonis

A heavenly being swinging demonic extremities,
Double edged fork tongue’s digging graves incessantly,
- loved the flow in these two lines, the whole verse really lies out the
angel and his plight very vividly. Im not a big fan of your flow, sometimes it feels
a bit clunky, but you are making a strong effort in providing rhymes and the vocab is crisp!

Samael,
What's been your purpose after HIS sacrifice?
They sin, “repent”; then are cleansed for after life,
You were deemed obsolete the day he arose,
So I purpose we fly free; and flutter coast to coast,
What's the point of wings, if we're locked in a cage?
HE wants US to flee, and keep Earth as OUR slave”...

-Fascinating turn of events here, albeit a bit abrupt, it gave the story some necessary tension which I liked

Thunder rolls as lightning folds monoliths to crumbling heaps,
- this is dope, wish you would do this more often

Strong ending, giving us that ultimatum decision, and bringing it home to the title. Strong vivid verse, with great detail
but I felt your storytelling and plot development was lacking a bit in some awkward wording.

Split

wash in austere infinity.
lapping in brain waves, concert hall echoing.
Boston Symphony.
this is deafening:
music to a silent memory of a place you knew,

- holy crap just beautiful use of enjambment and floating rhythm to give this the right feeling of loss,
you are able to capture in one image what it takes some writers several bars to do, including myself, essence of tight poetic writing.

The ending is great, its a bit elegiac and yet gives this picture of final release that fits the verse well.

Tough battle. I fear that Split's work may not get the credit it deserves, being as that it is so poetic.

Adonis came with just enough to win IMO despite lacking a strong story telling focus.

Vote -Adonis in a close one, great battle guys.