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Old 05-17-2013, 09:35 AM   #2
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needs either more internals/multies for the flow to be on point or shorter lines.

generally in S&F people tend to go the more is more approach, so i'd go with the former.

some of this seemed madd lazy though:

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Literally, my flow is oh so incredible and my timing is oh so impeccable
Seriously orc get me on the voters list, chyeeeh will vouch for how my votes are credible
oh so who gives a flying fuck? Sounds like you're begging for acceptance in that bar rather than just taking what you want.

you lose swag points for that IMO.

you're better than this.
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