Aesthetic, I feel that if you were to write another S&F verse you would do a lot differently. I've seen that you're a dope writer and it seems to me you didn't really know what direction to take, or didn't have a whole lot of time, or perhaps a combination. Wasn't the best verse I've read from you but I'm certain this will help you improve.
Paradigm, haven't read much from you but this was pretty dope man. Some of these lines were legit. Kinda upset though, you used the word shuriken and toss in a single line and I literally wrote a multi sequence to the scheme of 'shuriken toss' today haha so don't think I jacked it from you :P. Overall, some dope concepts with good flow. Your transition from the first rhyme scheme to the second was kinda clunky, but transitioning was smooth for the rest of the verse. More then enough to take the win
+1 Paradigm
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