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Old 05-16-2013, 06:41 PM   #2
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Groovy shit. Your writer definitely showed in a good way here, the technical stuff was all on point. Dug the whole verse being a part of one scheme, made it feel effortless and stream of thought (whether it was or wasnt) and that made it all the more impressive. Part I thought were the most effective:

I'm immortal, I'm death, because theres more then 5 senses
I'm a corporal flight expert that is soaring by jets
From the warmth of skies down to where the coral life's present
From a forest pine exit to the course of fine deserts within 4 or 5 seconds
I've contorted lines, bent them and then sorted like Tetris
From these fortified methods, left you horny as a porcupine sexting


Had that combination of a slick scheme, flow, imagery and general swaginess achieved through the concepts used. Definitely keep at it
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