Good match here fellas...
Unborn
Cool approach here, I dug the direction you took on the picture and you're obviously well-versed in the world of art and artists, given your content. For me it didn't start off strong, but by the end of the first quarter, I got drawn in. I agree with MMLP about the part he quoted, starting with the icarus line, it was solid and smooth. Bonus points for changing it up stylistically and attempting to attack frank at what he does. All in all though, it ended up feeling kind of expository, descriptive but in a bland way, to be somewhat paradoxical. I've been guilty of this myself, it can be hard to get away from on a topic you know so much about. All in all though, nice work here. Congrats again on getting to the championship match.
Frank
You did what you usually do, and in this case (as most) it worked out really well. You grabbed me from the beginning and kept me interested pretty much all the way through. The flow was smooth from the get-go, and I also liked the alliteration use near the beginning. Your use of vocabulary really set the tone of your piece, and it's execution helped bring it together. Your use of descriptive language to set the scene is impressive here. Enjoyed it sir, many thanks. And again, congratulations on getting to the championship match.
All in all, I did enjoy both, but after reading each a second time, I've got to go with Frank. His just grabbed me a little bit more. Good match fellas, enjoyed this entire season.
v/ Frank
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