Very dope battle. Zygote came nicely with a more truncated, aphoristic style. It was dope as fuck and was way more airy than Zee's which had a specific plot and and story. Zy, the one problem I had with your piece was that its ending was rather anti-climactic. The whole piece was so dope that I was expecting a NYC Hudson River Firecracker explosion but the bang wasn't so loud. If you can focus a bit more on ending with more suspense and decisiveness, you would be an incredibly formidable storyteller and it would add to your already lethal arsenal. ZeeDee I haven't seen yet or maybe I have if he's an alias but LMAO that shit was funny as fuck. Great elements of storytelling...it was humorous, creative and had me on a yo-yo string the entire time. While it lacked the profundity of zygote's material, it was an awesome story expertly told and a refreshing departure from most of the shit I've read on the internet. The ending was sick and I was honestly lol'ling throughout the whole piece.
Bottom line it comes down to preference here and I know a lot give the obligatory "it was close, could go either way" way too often but in this case I really do think it was pretty close in terms of creative impulse and writing aptitude. The deciding factor was that Zee's piece had the storytelling elements down pat and zygote's weaker ending hurt his chances a little bit. I think it'll be a close see-saw battle but to me Zee took this one in a great battle and probably BOTW esp. since mad people are probably gonna no-show. Thanks for the effort from both
V/ Zee
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