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Old 07-29-2016, 02:15 AM   #9
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this was pretty cool, I enjoyed the start & the section before that last part
the end of it came off as preachy, the guardian approach could have been utilized without the ending..
I thought the consequences/modest engines sequence was pretty dope though.
body aligned would have worked with wanted to find...it sounds right to me at least
basically the first half of this I enjoyed & parts of the second that I didnt.
overall a pretty cool piece.
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