I thought this was coo..i agree it could use some detail in your life for us to understand why you feel the way you do. doesnt have to be indepth but it should be put out there. i thought it flowed well.cant tell really cuz this is text. A reason why i dont get why people critique someones syllabic length. You dont know how dude would spit it. Those are just your opinion of how it should sound. keep flowing tho man..you've connected with the pen in making it therapy. Rap starts from the heart. You bleed that shit on the page by expressing your feelings. Good shit!
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