While I do enjoy the display of keeping a good scheme going for a while, here a lot of the rhymes were kind of easy for the kind of rhyming I expect from you. Your trek and work at the AOWL left a good impression on me. And this just isn't at that level. Now of course this probably meant to be at that caliber, so I will judge it as such.
It was okay, there were nice things about some of what you said. Albeit a good amount of the thoughts felt unoriginal. Sentiments I've read before, almost in the same way. I mean there is a limited number of emotions within humans, but the spectrum of how they can be conveyed is myriad. I think if you expanded this range of conveyance you would have a more luminous picture for the spectator to gaze upon.
Anyhow, those are my thoughts, thanks.
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