[Certain]

I’ve been funkin'
No hallitosis.
I got that lemon / baking powder home remedy and ya pal is focused.

The “lemon / baking powder home remedy” was unexpected and fun. The “ya pal is focused” felt like a very big stretch and awkward rhyme.

Even the north Cali homeless have Silicon Valley fortunes.
Fortunately half the homebreads aren't really bread at home.

I don’t understand what this means, unless you meant “bred at home.” Even so, I’m not sure why that’s fortunate.

I’m dead and zoned in a dead-end zone with my deadened soul.

This works well. It’s clever. Good line. Good decision not to start with it, too.

Dreading strolls based on preceeding expectations,
when around each corner a freezing hell awaits.
Sent numerous friend requests, empty texts, and breathless vents
from my helpless heads to complete the self-awaken.

This is very good, particularly the relatable third line. I’d have gone “self-awakening,” but I’m a pedant.

At night I dont hate fuck fake sluts, I eat their sense of safety
and proceed to please with vehement penetration.
A rush we ride that young'ns find easy when they're dating.
Then I light a victory match, which ignites the cigar and finish.

The transition here felt very forced.

The startling difference between normal and bizarre
is inches...
..Inches of space
such as a kiss on the lips or a spit in the face.
...Inches erased
such as holding a photo versus gripping a waist.
...Inches untraced
like a dear John letter that sounds like howling wind.

This was not nearly as profound as the structure postured.

I’ve read so many I could have drowned in fountain pens.

Doesn’t make sense.

My id and heart hit their mark when they faught my karma
so many times that I'm fit to star in a hospital drama.
Between the soap box and gold rocks locked in vaults of greed
I'm lost to see Whose Line Is It Anyway?
I'm callin' mockery.

I liked ending on a terrible pun. That doesn’t make it less terrible, but it has its charm.

This was a good-enough piece that was very rough around the edges and lacking focus. Clean up some of the slant rhymes and stop forcing twists that mess up the flow of the stream of consciousness. You turn a phrase well on occasion, but that occasion comes too infrequently because of the sloppiness. I will be looking for future works, @Otto Peighlaught. Also, learn to spell.