Complex – on second read, the first paragraph really comes to light, I see for what it’s meant to portray, its brilliant! Second paragraph was good, some references went over my head (had to look up ‘Shiva and Ifrit’ for example). Flow was crazy at times but the first section was better to read on preference. Dope verse, it’ll be hard to top!
Asylum – Your talking about fish getting trapped in a net, right? if so its really good, my main beef it that is not as comprehendible as it should be, just not enough clues (big risk). But the notion these fish have a clear sense of whats coming and are accepting. It is quite tragic but a great twist lol. the scene came to life with some lines, for example “moment of an eclipse” as container of sorts would have closed. Horrifyingly nice!
‘Felt the scales forming under my fingers as I gripped onto her hips’… line confuses me and makes me think ive got this all wrong but ill go with my instinct.
great spin on the topic but not enough went on to get invested in.
v/ Complex, enjoyed both!
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