I appreciate you keeping the scheme as long as you did on one hand. On the other it tired out the momentum of the verse. I will say this: you did something that I don't quite often encounter. That is the beginning felt slower to me, content wise, than the rest. It was an uphill pull, like a rollercoaster that continued into a downhill thrill. the logical stretch / ought to reflect bit was very easy to relate with, and well expressed. I dont know how to quantify the feeling, but this doesnt seem to be a stand-alone verse. Something that would go well in a collab or part of a song. It doesn't carry itself, instead it lends to something bigger. I hope you take that as a compliment, either way. Thank you.
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