[PancakeBrah]

The pagan, he waits. Sold his visions to false prophets.
Sold his image to cold profits. Sold his limits to our audience.
Kept us engaged. What more can we ask?

That's that good stuff.

I actually spent some time tonight looking back on my old Open Mics (wew lad, wew) and I can't be sure who I drew more influence from, you or dead man. Your way of writing complete sentences, in correct grammar, with almost poetic (this is probably the wrong word?) line breaks is something I see in my own writing that I didn't have when I first logged on here. It's a style that lends itself to misreading and missed rhymes if you're used to the usual textcee style. It's just prose with a rhyme, broken up at certain, crucial points. Could be wrong. Drunk and bored.

TO THE PIECE! You should pair this with the Derrick Rose verse you did some years back. I adore the first line of this piece. 'This fucking pungacious pugilist.' Although if I had written this I would have left out pugnacious. You're capturing the voice of the wrong of his time in that line, with a wink. While also working the tone you want for this piece. Maybe the first idea is my own reading? Doubt it. You have the worn style of someone who's tired of having to rhyme the first vowel of the previous line with the first vowel of the second. Just make a rhyme, if it's monosyllabic, whatever. I've a point to make, rook. If anything it's refreshing. It's good to see you writing again, even if it's a one off due to circumstance. Thanks for the read!