[PancakeBrah]

Under-looked was nice. As was

theres a poet in my nightmares & a beat box in the closet
theres a monster under my bed in some reeboks from Target

OVERALL THIS WAS A JAUNTY LITTLE DITTY. Airy, obsessed with form but not saying too much. BUT NOT ALL SAYINGS HAVE TO BE SAYING SO MUCH. I mean, fuck, not every little open mic has to be the human condition in multi-laden faux nostalgia aimed at some lost love with references to alcohol. I've read some number of your open mics without giving feed. I think I've said this before, but they get a tad samey. I think you have the same rhyme style and schemes in most. I appreciate the call back to those halcyon days when people just wrote some schemes and posted it. All you entries have a lack of pretentiousness that works well against the more 'serious' works that populate the forum. I just wish there was more that separated each individual verse from the next, ya dig? Thanks for the read.