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Old 06-16-2016, 06:41 PM   #4
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MMLP, verse was okay. Rhyming was alright, the story was okay, and I kinda feel like the ending is a cop out.. Eh, just a decent verse man. Nothing too crazy about it, nothing really stood out, it was just aiiight.

Artifice, I guess your verse falls under the same category. Maybe it's the topics / twist done to the topics, but I'm not feeling this ish'. I mean technically, your mechanics are on point. But, it was kinda boring to read. I read like 80% and expected to give MMLP the win just if he was able to entertain me through his verse. But, I really wasn't. *shrugs.

Hard battle to vote on, not a big fan of MMLP's verse this time, and although I couldn't get through all of Artifice's, it was the 'better' or the two verses here.

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